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Post by John Helmer on Mar 15, 2010 20:12:09 GMT -5
Walter stars in his own short from 1939. The King and Queen are on their Royal Tour of Canada and plot to assassinate the Royals is hatched until the villains meet their match: MacSorly, R.C.M.P. "Storm over Canada" 7 pages Written by John Michael Helmer Art by Mike Ratliff  |
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Post by John Helmer on Mar 15, 2010 20:13:17 GMT -5
MacSorly, R.C.M.P.
“Storm over Canada”
3-13-2010
by John Michael Helmer
Page 1
Splash page
Walter MacSorly, a Royal Canadian Mounted Police constable, is leaping from a water tank that stands along the tracks of the Canadian National Railroad. His arms and legs are spread wide out as he seems to float in the air from the water tower and onto the roof of the passenger car.
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Post by carandini on Mar 16, 2010 3:35:27 GMT -5
So far so good. Maybe tie things into WWII by having commies trying to assassinate the Royals and make it look like the work of the Nazis...
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Post by John Helmer on Mar 16, 2010 10:29:18 GMT -5
Notes on: The Royal Tour of Canada of 1939
Another factor, however, was public relations; the presence of the King and Queen, in both Canada and the United States, was calculated to shore up sympathy for Britain in anticipation of hostilities with Nazi Germany. Nevertheless, as early as 1939 it was deemed appropriate for the novel doctrine of the discrete crowns of the Commonwealth realms to be ostentatiously asserted.
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Post by John Helmer on Mar 16, 2010 10:39:02 GMT -5
Constable Kali Singh A loyal Mountie whose intelligence is unrivaled in the service.  |
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Post by carandini on Mar 19, 2010 20:36:05 GMT -5
Pretty straight-forward sort of story. I want no more quips about the Johnny Dingo one now.
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Post by John Helmer on Mar 19, 2010 22:11:50 GMT -5
Yes. I bow to your superior writing skills.
Did I solve the nazi-commie link you wanted?
Hey, what about Constable Singh? I thought you would like that guy!!!
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Post by carandini on Mar 20, 2010 1:00:00 GMT -5
Constable Singh is an odd fit, but he works. I would find a different first name though, Kali being the goddess of death in Hindu religion.
I might try re-wording the way MacSorly reveals Palmier's plans. Play with those couple of sentences more.
Also, there must be some kind of slang for Mountie that Palmier would use. It sounds a bit awkward as it is.
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Post by John Helmer on Mar 20, 2010 8:02:41 GMT -5
Fantasic suggestions! I'll make those corrections straight away!
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Post by John Helmer on Apr 9, 2010 22:46:17 GMT -5
Mike Ratliff has begun work on the 7 page MacSorly, RCMP story!!! Will post teasers when he sends any pages! Check out Mike's work at: www.mikeratliff.mosaicglobe.com |
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